Sunday, January 17, 2010

REGRETS and REMORSE...the tale of a regretful soul!!!


...Putting aside all his regrets and remorse,
He stepped in silent pace to the city of peace,
Leaning side by side is his gone-by past,
Filled with tears is his heart.

Uncommon thoughts remind him of thee,
Some silent steps; also brought by the scene, windy!

Lying close in his arms when her eyes shone,
arms that no more hold him as mine,
is now the regret he will always own.

Lets throw away the memories in the stream;
are the words he speaks to his soul.
'These are the words you always speak',
bursts out his lonely soul.

Getting ashamed of his own cowardice,
He hides his face in a dark disguise.

Life didn't turn out, the way he expected,
Everything he did, he regretted,
Be it to him or to anyone subjected.

He had a dream,
But what did he do to get it?



Still..He must go on as he should,
The sun rose and there he stood,
Might I find peace somewhere close,
Lets ignore this present remorse.

16 comments:

  1. very nice poem indeed...you've painted a wonderful picture of how a man regrets his past as he looks back...after reading your fourth poem, i'm truly moved to see your style of expression and the way you stream your imaginations into words. I was truly carried away by the flow of thoughts through out this poem...until i reached the end.

    the ones that really touched me were, namely;

    --"Lets throw away the memories in the stream;
    are the words he speaks to his soul.
    'These are the words you always speak'
    bursts out his lonely soul"--

    and this one really portrays a very true and common picture of everyone's life..

    --"Life didn't turn out, the way he expected,
    Everything he did, he regretted,
    Be it to him or to anyone subjected"--

    and like your other poems, this one also ended with a remarkable stanza..

    --"Still..He must go on as he should,
    The sun had come out and there he stood,
    Might I find peace somewhere close,
    Lets ignore this present remorse"--

    Looking forward to read more..

    regards,

    AB

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  2. wow... dis z nyc... i luhv it... u've got real talent 4 poetry... keep it up... gr8 work ~ G'

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  3. i adore ur poem's they r all so beutiful u have gret toughts and a big imagination that might take u places someday keepat it!!!! u have a great future ahead of u!!!

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  4. i really love ur poems...they r beautiful...u have got beutiful imagination...n have a got great talent for poetry..the poems r so beutiful dat i even insisted my sisters to read them too..n they loved it tooo.keep it up:D

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  5. nice poem.... loving the last two stanzas!!!!!

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  6. Wow yar its amazing......Every poem of urs is just outstanding nd trough dese poems ur makin ur personalty beautiful day by day.....Yar de "filled with tears is his heart" part was my fav.....I m lookin forward to ur next poem.....

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  7. vry vry nice poem.d way u express ur thoughts n feelngz in magical wordz z js perfct! lyk ur all odr poemz ths 1 also gvz a moral lesson; He had a dream,
    but wat did he do to get it?
    vry true n beautiful.
    opening n clozng stanzaz lovly written!!
    greatttttt done!
    Best wishes!

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  8. ok this one poem of yours has perplexed me.The grief and remorse of a regretful soul has been beautifully expressed but i would prefer to see more lines putting some solace on the wounds of a man whose past is haunting him.With remorse and regret comes a strong promise to make up for the lose in the future and
    still..he must go on as he should,
    the sun rose and there he stood,
    might i find peace somewhere close,
    lets ignore this present remorse.
    has defined it nicely but i still feel the sorrow condition demands more encouragement and motivation to continue his journey in the city of peace.

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  9. A good poem, sad but not hopeless :) I love it

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  10. vow its great
    it has such a fine rhyming n flow that i read it......... n then read it again.

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  11. Very well written Am and heres why, this poem shows that ur a versatile writer, wich i think is a gr8 asset to have and also i like when u include all diffrent aspects of life such as in this poem. Love the way u paint a picture for us, sort of speak. 5 stars amna! :-) love it!

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  12. Wow Miss Amna its amazing, u have got great talent for poetry (Mashallah). keep it up

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  13. salam.i read ur this poem its realy beautifully written.u gave us lots of nice varriation to read . ALLAH BLESS U

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  14. wow!!mona api..this is the best i ever hav read..keep it up...

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  15. I am deeply moved by this one, it shows how talented u r masha Allah. Way to go Amzzz. You connect with the reader so instantly and effectively that very few will be ones who will remain untouched by these lines. Bravo

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Sunday, January 17, 2010

REGRETS and REMORSE...the tale of a regretful soul!!!


...Putting aside all his regrets and remorse,
He stepped in silent pace to the city of peace,
Leaning side by side is his gone-by past,
Filled with tears is his heart.

Uncommon thoughts remind him of thee,
Some silent steps; also brought by the scene, windy!

Lying close in his arms when her eyes shone,
arms that no more hold him as mine,
is now the regret he will always own.

Lets throw away the memories in the stream;
are the words he speaks to his soul.
'These are the words you always speak',
bursts out his lonely soul.

Getting ashamed of his own cowardice,
He hides his face in a dark disguise.

Life didn't turn out, the way he expected,
Everything he did, he regretted,
Be it to him or to anyone subjected.

He had a dream,
But what did he do to get it?



Still..He must go on as he should,
The sun rose and there he stood,
Might I find peace somewhere close,
Lets ignore this present remorse.

16 comments:

  1. very nice poem indeed...you've painted a wonderful picture of how a man regrets his past as he looks back...after reading your fourth poem, i'm truly moved to see your style of expression and the way you stream your imaginations into words. I was truly carried away by the flow of thoughts through out this poem...until i reached the end.

    the ones that really touched me were, namely;

    --"Lets throw away the memories in the stream;
    are the words he speaks to his soul.
    'These are the words you always speak'
    bursts out his lonely soul"--

    and this one really portrays a very true and common picture of everyone's life..

    --"Life didn't turn out, the way he expected,
    Everything he did, he regretted,
    Be it to him or to anyone subjected"--

    and like your other poems, this one also ended with a remarkable stanza..

    --"Still..He must go on as he should,
    The sun had come out and there he stood,
    Might I find peace somewhere close,
    Lets ignore this present remorse"--

    Looking forward to read more..

    regards,

    AB

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  2. wow... dis z nyc... i luhv it... u've got real talent 4 poetry... keep it up... gr8 work ~ G'

    ReplyDelete
  3. i adore ur poem's they r all so beutiful u have gret toughts and a big imagination that might take u places someday keepat it!!!! u have a great future ahead of u!!!

    ReplyDelete
  4. i really love ur poems...they r beautiful...u have got beutiful imagination...n have a got great talent for poetry..the poems r so beutiful dat i even insisted my sisters to read them too..n they loved it tooo.keep it up:D

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  5. nice poem.... loving the last two stanzas!!!!!

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  6. Wow yar its amazing......Every poem of urs is just outstanding nd trough dese poems ur makin ur personalty beautiful day by day.....Yar de "filled with tears is his heart" part was my fav.....I m lookin forward to ur next poem.....

    ReplyDelete
  7. vry vry nice poem.d way u express ur thoughts n feelngz in magical wordz z js perfct! lyk ur all odr poemz ths 1 also gvz a moral lesson; He had a dream,
    but wat did he do to get it?
    vry true n beautiful.
    opening n clozng stanzaz lovly written!!
    greatttttt done!
    Best wishes!

    ReplyDelete
  8. ok this one poem of yours has perplexed me.The grief and remorse of a regretful soul has been beautifully expressed but i would prefer to see more lines putting some solace on the wounds of a man whose past is haunting him.With remorse and regret comes a strong promise to make up for the lose in the future and
    still..he must go on as he should,
    the sun rose and there he stood,
    might i find peace somewhere close,
    lets ignore this present remorse.
    has defined it nicely but i still feel the sorrow condition demands more encouragement and motivation to continue his journey in the city of peace.

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  9. A good poem, sad but not hopeless :) I love it

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  10. vow its great
    it has such a fine rhyming n flow that i read it......... n then read it again.

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  11. Very well written Am and heres why, this poem shows that ur a versatile writer, wich i think is a gr8 asset to have and also i like when u include all diffrent aspects of life such as in this poem. Love the way u paint a picture for us, sort of speak. 5 stars amna! :-) love it!

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  12. Wow Miss Amna its amazing, u have got great talent for poetry (Mashallah). keep it up

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  13. salam.i read ur this poem its realy beautifully written.u gave us lots of nice varriation to read . ALLAH BLESS U

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  14. wow!!mona api..this is the best i ever hav read..keep it up...

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  15. I am deeply moved by this one, it shows how talented u r masha Allah. Way to go Amzzz. You connect with the reader so instantly and effectively that very few will be ones who will remain untouched by these lines. Bravo

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