Saturday, January 30, 2010


Memory of a scattered dream, or a sad face
That of a tear of an eye, or a tragic phase

May be of a lost word, or never ending obsession
Or a love of my life, or a regret of my existence

I know not, but something lacks in my resurrection
So I fall deep in the ocean of my non-existence

Is it a light wind or a gale?
Is it charity of feelings or emotions for sale?

Depth of an ocean or height of a sky
A question of who and a query of why

An open aggression, a hidden betrayal
I know not but something causes me to fail

I am lost and so is my verse
I don’t know what I wrote until you point out from the source

It seems I am ire and completely lost
That one thing now I hold, the other moment it is sold

Lost with the sight or with the rhythm of my poem
I understand not the words that I coin.

Is it by chance or an act of my conscience?
So here I stand incomplete & senseless

I am lost and so is my soul.

11 comments:

  1. Yar its really a nice poem nd i really really liked it u know i m really moved by ur poems... There is so much passion nd emotion in ur poems dat every time u read it. It touches ur heart really deep... Keep it up yar....:-)

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  2. Nw m sure if u keep on wrytng u ll surly make big name lyk john keats:)its so so so lovly..brngs so much emotions tht m
    complitly lost in LOST..splendid!enchanting!fascinating!keep on wrytng n go ahead! best wishes..stay kool!

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  3. Hi Am, wow this particular poem means alot to me. When i first read this poem i was able to feel the pain that one might experience when they are lost or troubled. Kudos to u Amna. Liked the way the poem flows as i read it. Ive experienced this poem in my real life, so the authenticity is there. Awesome stuff Am!

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  4. INCREDIBLE!!

    And do a poem with my fave show give you 500 more points!!

    Wish you the best luck!

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  5. I lost myself while reading your poem.Well,you beautifully followed the theme throughout the poem and
    i know not,but somehing lacks in my resurrection
    so i fall deep in the cean of my non existance
    are my favourite lines from the poem.
    the beginning of the poem is very strong and till
    an open agression, a hidden betrayal
    i know not but something causes me to fail

    it gives an impression of something missing in your existence which renders you unfulfilled and curious to know the reason for your lacking.
    but when you say,
    i am lost and so is my verse
    and i don't know what i wrote untill you point out from the spurce

    here the flow of thoughts take a sudden corrugation, the beauty of being lost lies in the fact that you don't know you are lost when infact you are, and you have radiantly described it in you initial verses.But when you say you are lost, it alters the route to the same destination.i found the ending lines a bit sketchy, but the last line "i am lost and so is my soul" outweighed them.

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  6. This is such a beautiful expression of emotions Amz.....I could feel every bit of it......and could relate to it myself.....Hats off to you.

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  7. wonderful theme and lovely expression of thoughts... no wonder Y i'm a big fan of urs :)

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  8. wOw!! Its amazingly wonderful.........

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  9. I don't have words to justify the great work you have done Amna. I really like the essence of your poems which is originality, purity, imaginative, deep and thought provoking. It is beautifully written, excellent choice of words with amazing cadence. It was really a treat for me to read it.
    Congratulations!

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  10. I loved the flow and message of this poem!

    "Is it a light wind or a gale?
    Is it charity of feelings or emotions for sale?" was a beautiful rhyme, very descriptive and passionate.
    Also this rhyme was really great:

    "Depth of an ocean or height of a sky
    A question of who and a query of why"

    The flow is so good, yet it's still so full of meaning and emotion! Beautiful!
    Keep up the good work! :)

    ReplyDelete

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Saturday, January 30, 2010


Memory of a scattered dream, or a sad face
That of a tear of an eye, or a tragic phase

May be of a lost word, or never ending obsession
Or a love of my life, or a regret of my existence

I know not, but something lacks in my resurrection
So I fall deep in the ocean of my non-existence

Is it a light wind or a gale?
Is it charity of feelings or emotions for sale?

Depth of an ocean or height of a sky
A question of who and a query of why

An open aggression, a hidden betrayal
I know not but something causes me to fail

I am lost and so is my verse
I don’t know what I wrote until you point out from the source

It seems I am ire and completely lost
That one thing now I hold, the other moment it is sold

Lost with the sight or with the rhythm of my poem
I understand not the words that I coin.

Is it by chance or an act of my conscience?
So here I stand incomplete & senseless

I am lost and so is my soul.

11 comments:

  1. Yar its really a nice poem nd i really really liked it u know i m really moved by ur poems... There is so much passion nd emotion in ur poems dat every time u read it. It touches ur heart really deep... Keep it up yar....:-)

    ReplyDelete
  2. Nw m sure if u keep on wrytng u ll surly make big name lyk john keats:)its so so so lovly..brngs so much emotions tht m
    complitly lost in LOST..splendid!enchanting!fascinating!keep on wrytng n go ahead! best wishes..stay kool!

    ReplyDelete
  3. Hi Am, wow this particular poem means alot to me. When i first read this poem i was able to feel the pain that one might experience when they are lost or troubled. Kudos to u Amna. Liked the way the poem flows as i read it. Ive experienced this poem in my real life, so the authenticity is there. Awesome stuff Am!

    ReplyDelete
  4. INCREDIBLE!!

    And do a poem with my fave show give you 500 more points!!

    Wish you the best luck!

    ReplyDelete
  5. I lost myself while reading your poem.Well,you beautifully followed the theme throughout the poem and
    i know not,but somehing lacks in my resurrection
    so i fall deep in the cean of my non existance
    are my favourite lines from the poem.
    the beginning of the poem is very strong and till
    an open agression, a hidden betrayal
    i know not but something causes me to fail

    it gives an impression of something missing in your existence which renders you unfulfilled and curious to know the reason for your lacking.
    but when you say,
    i am lost and so is my verse
    and i don't know what i wrote untill you point out from the spurce

    here the flow of thoughts take a sudden corrugation, the beauty of being lost lies in the fact that you don't know you are lost when infact you are, and you have radiantly described it in you initial verses.But when you say you are lost, it alters the route to the same destination.i found the ending lines a bit sketchy, but the last line "i am lost and so is my soul" outweighed them.

    ReplyDelete
  6. This is such a beautiful expression of emotions Amz.....I could feel every bit of it......and could relate to it myself.....Hats off to you.

    ReplyDelete
  7. wonderful theme and lovely expression of thoughts... no wonder Y i'm a big fan of urs :)

    ReplyDelete
  8. wOw!! Its amazingly wonderful.........

    ReplyDelete
  9. I don't have words to justify the great work you have done Amna. I really like the essence of your poems which is originality, purity, imaginative, deep and thought provoking. It is beautifully written, excellent choice of words with amazing cadence. It was really a treat for me to read it.
    Congratulations!

    ReplyDelete
  10. I loved the flow and message of this poem!

    "Is it a light wind or a gale?
    Is it charity of feelings or emotions for sale?" was a beautiful rhyme, very descriptive and passionate.
    Also this rhyme was really great:

    "Depth of an ocean or height of a sky
    A question of who and a query of why"

    The flow is so good, yet it's still so full of meaning and emotion! Beautiful!
    Keep up the good work! :)

    ReplyDelete

Thanks a bunch to all the readers and comment writers!!

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